tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-636748218599005397.post2316153987948656359..comments2013-05-02T09:50:45.325-07:00Comments on Ally's Awsome Blog: The Huntallyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04000413430758117603noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-636748218599005397.post-47714953630958174972013-03-13T09:39:16.383-07:002013-03-13T09:39:16.383-07:001. i think that you could've explained more of...1. i think that you could've explained more of their journey to their house. <br />2. i Could tell that the kids have been running for a long time and that they have changed while they were running. <br />3. my favorite part of the story was when they had met seth he he said he would stay back so that they could get away.<br />4. your dialogue was good ad the way you worded it was nice and smooth when i was reading.<br />5.I understood what the theme was and it was very clear.<br />6. i think what you have to fix is you use the same words over and over sometimes other wise it was really good:)Karley Beyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02645066057268636257noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-636748218599005397.post-70935799460192512802013-03-13T09:36:25.651-07:002013-03-13T09:36:25.651-07:001.) The conflict in the story is that Leah Annie a...1.) The conflict in the story is that Leah Annie and Conner and Seth are all hiding from the hunter.The external conflict is the hunters finding them . The resolution is that Conner and his two sisters found a road home.<br />2.) The main character Conner didn't really change through the story they all stayed the same.l<br />3.)My favorite part of the story was when Conner went back to save his little sister and carried her even though he knew it would slow them down.<br />4.) I think that the best quality of this story is the element of a plot, the plot in this story makes you want to read more and more. This is a good quality because in a short story that is what you want you want to have as many people to read your story and get feedback from them to make your story better.<br />5.) In this story ally plants seeds for another story to be written because she leaves you at a cliffhanger and you want to know what happens next.<br />6.)I think that the main thing that you need to revise before you get your final grade is to maye to add more details about where they are and how the characters feel throughout the story.Libby Mercierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12245143958135718725noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-636748218599005397.post-68573312156215970092013-03-12T13:15:41.371-07:002013-03-12T13:15:41.371-07:00WHAT HAPPENED TO SETH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
1. I tho...WHAT HAPPENED TO SETH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!<br />1. I thought that the conflict was great and it reminded me of the hunger games a little with the game keepers and such. I wish you said something about Seth<br />2. The family needed to get away from the hunters, then they met Seth who helped them with that. <br />3. My favorite part of the story was when They were going to run and then Lean got her foot stuck and then Seth said he would help them get away!<br />4. I loved that the setting was from the barn story we had to write!<br />5. The seed that you planted was the way that they were talking and how i know that something would happen but I could tell what which made me more and more interested. <br />6. I liked everything about it i thought that it was great, very well done!<br /> Great Job Ally!Shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01096729685180948702noreply@blogger.com